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In 4. Benefits of the Digital Media Project
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Rights holders

Security technologies promise rights holders that they will retain control of their assets when they distribute content.
Copyright holders will benefit from a reliable method for detecting copyright infringements. Individual creators will be enabled to track the spread of their IP, and to protect themselves from plagiarism, even if they are not part of a value chain.

The rights and expectations of end users will also be respected. Their rights include privacy and value-for-money. Their expectations include that they will continue to be able to enjoy the products of a lively IP industry.

No DRM solution will be implementable unless it is perceived to consistently respect the rights of all members of society. The last few years have shown that the problem with protected content does not "just" lie with technology. To this end, the DMP will work towards improving public awareness of the need for copyright.

This last is a major extension of the DMP charter. What about saying: "The work of the DMP will contribute to public awareness of the value of content".

Copyright is not a licence to print money, or a form of theft imposed on society by powerful pressure groups, but a mechanism for ensuring the continued existence of organisations which supply the IP which end users want.

Do you really want to have this "pro-copyright" publicity? 

The DMP will provide a specification of interfaces for interoperable DRM systems, including end user devices. In doing this it will carry over to the digital space the rights that end users have traditionally enjoyed in such a way that the essence of content protection is not put at risk. This will include solving the maze of home user rights. Lastly it will provide recommended practices for conformance.

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Here is the original text. I have omitted red text. The last sentence in the first paragraph probably needs reformulating and putting somewhere else (it is not about rights).

Rights holders

Security technologies promise rights holders that they will retain control of their assets when they distribute content. The last few years have shown that the problem with protected content does not "just" lie with technology. There is a need to have consistency of DRM solutions across the value chain and there is the cost of deploying end user devices that are mindful of end user expectations, Then there is the problem of converting a value chain from one way of doing business to another radically different way.

The DMP intends to provide solutions to these problems. It will provide a specification of interfaces for interoperable DRM systems, including end user devices. In doing this it will carry over to the digital space the rights that end users have traditionally enjoyed in such a way that the essence of content protection is not put at risk. This will include solving the maze of home user rights. Lastly it will provide recommended practices for conformance.

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